Creative Writing 101: Sunset

Describe a sunset as viewed by a character that is in bliss; describe the same sunset but this time as seen by a character that is in gloom.

A mixture of blood and smoke scattered beyond the vast firmament of
heaven.. Dispersed in malformed glorious clouds; half part is
sprinkled in snow and the other part of wine and of rubies and of
sunflowers. Celestial lavishness corrupts me. Stars reach me.  I
closed my eyes. And still, I see hues and phantasm. I am in bliss.

The dusk, a thief, stole everything. It painted the sky selfishly.
Smothered the sun with something heavy. With something so heavy, it
decided to free its fall and be swallowed by the sea. As the sun
slumber on its grave, the night cloaks the earth and my vision
darkened. It was gloomy.

While reading a book at a library slash book store, I came upon a creative writing composition. It has lots of exercises and tips on creative writing. One of the exercises include fleshing out a stranger you have seen the first time. Compose stories about that stranger and why he is on that place. And a lot more exercises. While at work, I answered this exercise where I have to describe the same sunset as seen by a happy and a sad person for five minutes (squeezing my writing ability to its boundary in a time constraint manner). Next time, I’ll try this creative writing again with different rules, probably two street dogs making love from a child’s perspective and an old guy’s perspective.. Probably or probably not. It depends.

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225 thoughts on “Creative Writing 101: Sunset

      1. the sun might set unfairly to some places.

        the north and the south pole, everything there is but long months of night time and another long months of day time.

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        1. But then again, no other character, on an earth that is ruthlessly lit by never ending sunsets, can truly feel how happy it would be to have the sun shine even just a day. =)

          “Midnight, Scorching Noon, Sunset, Dawn, Sunrise, I think they are all magically beautiful!”

          Right on. 😀

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    1. ako kumuha nyan ^_^ wahahaha…
      sbi ko na nga ba eh may career ako sa photography…
      using my ever reliable canon ixus 970IS…
      i really love watching the sunset…
      sayang lang i left it when we went to ilocos last june…
      maganda din sna sunset dun T_T
      I also have one when we were in boracay last nov.

      next stop…sunset ng kota kinabalu! =)

      thanx ax for sharing my photo.
      I really appreciate the feed backs…

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      1. i’ll be there on kota kinabalu. what a coincidence, we may be beside each other on the plane?!

        haha.

        sige, gusto ko yan. excited na ako. argh.

        no problem!

        ow, when you thanked me on this comment, you are ‘just’ like Fauxx. I don’t know. Fauxx sometimes brings the best out of me when he says ‘thank you’ or ‘good job.’ haha.

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        1. san na passport number mo? i-edit ko pa kaya e-ticket natin? bahala ka kapag nakalimutan ko na yun…

          at si Amiah: edited yan 😀

          walang sunset tayong inabutan sa Ilocos dahil nasa van na tayo that time… at in-love ka pa nun XP

          at parang nakalimutan nyo na pupunta rin tayong Brunei. Pero, oo nga, isang araw lang kasi tayo dun..

          PS: Hindi ba nila mabasa ang nasa picture? Para tanungin ka nila kung ikaw ang kumuha????
          LOL

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  1. i really liked the photo. it feels like im one of them, silently being fascinated by the luxurious essence of the whole scenario. Its like droplets of the golden sun, ready to form a vigilant substance that will occupy my restless mind. I can still reminisce that moment when I last picture the sunset using my own vision..

    in other words. im speechless..

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    1. ganyan din ako magsalita noong una akong nakatikim ng babae 🙂
      wait…come to think of it, bakit sya may bigote?

      anyway, sa wakas di na virgin si hamster. congrats sa inyo ni ax!

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  2. wow ax.. i really love sunsets..ganda ng photo na yan,, pag umuuwi ako dito sa la union galing ng dagupan ito ung hinahanap ko.. every afternoon din nasa tabing dagat ako wathing the sunset.. thanks.. ganda nito..

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    1. aw. every summer means La Union nung bata ako! hehe.

      really? we are just some tires away sa beach ng la union.. we sometimes celebrates nothing day sa beach kasama ang buong angkan namin. hehe.

      no problem! and thanks also!

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  3. well, everything is all about perspective. For me, nothing is absolute.

    about, the sun. here is my not so creative writing:

    Oh the sun is beautiful and i am happy.

    Oh the sun is beutiful but i am sad.

    wehehehe

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  4. In bliss, there was hope to see the sunshine
    In gloom, the last sailing was bound to end.
    Your innocence, your fear, your future.

    I couldn’t say more words, the photograhp is enough to unleash the ominous part in me. If there is light, how could you convince the not so innocent mind, there is an end? Where is the beginning?

    PS.
    What is the title of the book? I want to purchase too.

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        1. Creative Writing sort of ang title. Magkakatabi sila. Okay. I’ll try to explain the specific shelves of that specific book.

          Naalala mo yung, phrase na “ikaw ang pumunta dito.” Banda dun.

          Do I make sense?

          Money wise, hindi ko kase bibilhin yung book na yan. Binasa ko lang. Hehe. Haha. Hoho.

          Nagbabasa lang ako ng books. Ang mga binibili ko eh local artist/writers.. at mostly mga comic books.

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    1. haha, sorry! actually naghahanap ako ng link sa blog ni kuya bongkito at sa mga bagong kakilala pero wala akong mahanap na words.. kaya as usual sa blog ko na lang ulit ako naghanap!

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    1. Maganda yung book, nakakastimulate. Aw. Stimulate!

      Salamat. Yung image, di ako kumuha niyan, classmate ko.

      Haha, at salamat ulit. Nagbasa ako kase baka marami pa akong hindi alam. Hehe.

      Salamat, kuya Dencio. Magbukas ka lang ng blog, papakyawin ko ang comment section!

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  5. typical na tanawin yan sa zambales.

    sa hapon habang unti unting papalubog ang araw ay naguunahan naman sa pagahon ang mga mangingisda mula sa dagat.

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    1. Sobrang saya nung nagpunta kami ng Zambales. Kahit walang pera, masaya pa din.

      Hindi namin napuntahan yung Capones Island, balak ko rin bumalik don ulit.

      Kulang ang panahon. Sarap balik balikan.. Sarap ulit ulitin.

      (Alam ko, may sasabihin si Kuya Jesse, haha.)

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      1. malapit sa tabing dagat ung location ng bukid sa zambales at tanaw ung 3 isla.
        kung sa capones kayo magagawi marami rami na magagandang resort don ngaun at kung me time maari din umakyat sa kalapit bundok.

        noon marami tiga manila nakikituloy sa mismong bahay sa bukid at sa mga kubo tinatayo sa tabing dagat ng mga tiyo ko para menos sa bayad at mula don nagpapahatid sila sa capones.

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  6. The sunset always makes me think of myself. Every evening, the sun sets on roughly seven billion people. I evaluate my own life in relation to those many others. My problems, cares, and woes seem small and petty to me, and I feel guilty for stressing over such trivial problems compared the serious problems other people have to deal with. It is a humbling, and slightly depressing, yet strangely comforting, experience. Comforting in the sense that while the sun is setting on those people with “real” problems, it does not fail to set on me, and show me its beauty. God sends his love to all his children, no matter how trivial they seem.

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    1. As the sun sets in this area, somewhere in some part of the globe, the sun rises.

      And we share the same setting and rising of the sun at the same time.. you and me in a different place. in a different perspective.

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  7. eto raw ang poem ni jason tungkol jan. here we go at walang iyakan:
    ru ru ru ur boot
    gintlee dawn de strim
    merilee merilee merilee merilee
    layp is butt e dreem…

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  8. That experience won me a magazine courtesy of Dong Ho’s Eskapo.

    Just comment any of road trip experiences, here is mine:

    mahapdi na ang mga mata ko habang nakasakay sa bangka kasama ang apat pang kaibigan. galing kami sa isla ng anawangin. nakatitig ako sa papalubog na araw, sa nagkalat na ulap na kulay dugo, at ang pagtalsik ng tubig ang pawang nagpapalamig sa katawan ko. gandang ganda ako sa haring araw na nais ng matulog, at bigla bigla ay may tumalon na isang dolphin.

    kung pumikit ako ng oras na iyon, siguro magsisisi ako buong buhay ko.

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          1. We just figured out Blue’s clues!
            We just figured out Blue’s clues!
            We just figured out Blue’s clues…
            Because we’re really smart!

            Ahahaha :))

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  9. same old coffee table blog ni ginoong ax mula ng huli akong mapadpad dito. heehee. gusto kong itry un “fleshing out a stranger you have seen the first time”. hmm-

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      1. ilan beses mo na natry?? hehe sige magawa bukas pagpasok ko, sana maalala ko.

        pero parang mas masarap siyang gawin sa pampasaherong bus o kaya sa gitna ng mall. waah naeexcite ako 🙂

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        1. kahit saan pwede mo naman yan gawin.. sa isip ko lang ginagawa.. minsan pag may kausap. this was an exercise pero ginagawa na namin dati ng mga classmates ko not knowing, this is creative thinking. hoho.

          sige lang, try lang ng try at paganahin ang utak!

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  10. galing ah.. gustong gusto ko ring kumukuha ng mga ganyang pics.. eto nga sa bago kong post dagat din at may bangka.. ewan ko ba ang sarap kasi s pakiramdam pag nakakakita ako ng ganyan..

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      1. hehe oo nga… sa amin kasi normal lang na nakakakita ng ganyan… pag medyo bad trip ako, punta ako at tambay.. hehe.. thanks nga pala sa paalala u sa akin na lagyan ko ng watermark. minsan kasi nakaklimutan ko or tinatamad ako.. hehe.. pero dapat talaga meron.. hehe.. gagawin ko un…

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          1. oo nga. hehe.. dami ko pa kasing pinag aaralan sa blogging kasi bago pa lang ako.. last october 2009 lang nabili tong domain ko kaya ngayon pinag aaralan ko pa ang set up gaya nitong sayo na maganda ang set up sa commens hehe… di ko alam panu gawin na ganito ang blog ko.. patulong..

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  11. I love the pic! astig ang pagkaka kuha mo AX!

    i like it both sunrise and sunset, though im a sunrise person…. ^_^ gulo bah?!

    Ano pla ang camera mo na gamit? i mean model?

    pagpatuloy mo lang Ax, may future ka! pag uwi ko sama tayo sa mga kakibigan kong professional photographers. 😀

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          1. Gawa ako sa bakal, soriness, kalawang lang ang pwedeng pumatay sa akin.Buharhar..Buharhar.

            Mtoni,magpakita ka,kala mo lang sungit ako, super duper bait ako, promise. I love you..hakhak

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          1. anong nangyari? Fads.

            Mtoni, hindi ako masungit..mabait ako, tanong mo pa kay Ax, pinadugo ko nga nguso niyan, nagsuntukan kami tapos nagkarate, nagboksing pero hindi kami nag-uusap.

            Mtoni, I love you..Mwahhhh

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  12. ganda nga nung shot.. pero wow ung editing.. galing! hmmm kung ako ang magde-describe ng sunset ganito ko iyon ilalarawan..

    PINAGHALONG KABA’T UTOT DULOT NG SUMABOG NA NITROGEN BOMB NA HINDI INAKALANG LILIKHA NG ISANG OBRANG MAMALASIN NG MGA PANGKARANIWANG NILALANG NA WALANG PAMBILI NG YOSI SA ISANG HAPON.

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      1. I know right!!!

        …nagpapaka-dalubhasa ka na sa Ingles kasi eh.. kaya ayan mag-Filipino naman tayo! Mag-enrol kaya tayo ng MALIKHAING PAGSULAT sa UP.. hehehe ano sa tingin mo? Tsaka teka nakakasawa din mag-Ingles… palibhasa hindi ka nag-call center! hehehehe

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        1. Haha, seriously, I think I do need to enhance this writing ability of mine.. I am still thinking about it. Considering ‘my everyday schedule’ and the ‘money,’ of course.. I can’t make it.

          The lack of my drive to study, I make amends with apportioning some of my time reading books about creative writing. 🙂

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  13. madalas pag ako nagsusulat….isang bagay o tao lang ang subject ko at dito ko pinapaikot ang kwento….mas masarap at fulfilling ang makapagsulat tungkol sa isang tao na di mo naman talaga kilala…..mas malaya ka kasing makapag-express ng iyong diwa…

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          1. hahaha.. axe baka nga isa un ang reason ng pagiging influential mo.. hehe.. kwela nga si father eh nababsa ko mga comments nya sa ibang mga sites.. natatawa ako.. may mga banat sya.. hehe

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  14. Hmmm sa anawangin pala yan! I had a sad story about it… nag-aya pumunta ang mga officemates ko last summer mag-anawangin, hindi ako sumama, sayang super ganda daw dun!

    Anyway i hope this year makapunta ako dun and see the sunset! Gogogogo!

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    1. total corporate blog naman itong blog ni ax,ako na ang sasagot nito orville:

      dashboard — punta ka sa appearances —

      may makikita kang ibat ibang options (themes, widgets, extras, etc.)

      click mo ang CURRENT THEME OPTIONS (kung di mo ito makikita, ibig sabihin ang header mo ay di customizable)

      pag kinlik mo yang current theme options, makikita mo ang header setting: ito ay may tatlong options: header image url, header image, header text…

      sa header image url, ilagay mo ang url sa iyong blog (i presupposed na may photobucket account ka…)

      save settings…

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        1. Haha, salamat sa pagsagot Father Fiel, pero hindi po. Iba po ang setup ng dot com sa wordpress blogs.

          Aw. Mas maproseso ang pag-ups ng header sa amin.

          Orville, may download ka ba ng filezilla?

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  15. ahahaha! mag-co-comment muna ako sa mgha comments…
    napakasaya talaga ng usapan dito… gosh, si kulisap nag-english.

    ganda ng pic… may kakaibang dala sa aking mga mata at pakiramdam… ewan ko… basta…magbabasa na nga ako ng post, 😀

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  16. wow… ang galeng. two different point of views, of different emotions…

    bookstore slash libary, er… ano nga bang bookstore yan? yan yung kulay blue… di ko maalala. red yung NBS diba. teka… 🙂

    magandang araw Ax! 🙂

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      1. Bakit parang takot na takot na bata ito.Mas matakot ka diyan kay Ax, mapanganib yan, lalo naman kay Jess.

        Hindi rin ako marunong makipag-away. Ano po yong away po Mtoni po? Please insert emote icon here.

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  17. Discussing this between me and my manager, we would have to say this is an overly informative post that deserves mentioning elsewhere. This is for 2 types of writers: current writers who are considering another career, and people trying to prefer to become a writer.

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